Time's Legacy

[Sontar Ha]

Oh god! Real blood!!!! Quite morbid really! You'd probably want to be careful how you describe that to people, you don't want them thinking you self harm over toys!

[The Professor]

I don't tend to tell people about all this at all...

It wasn't that... I'm not sure what the word is.... creepy.
The way you described I was almost scared of myself!
I just have a bit of a short attention span, and whilst my sister borrowed the camera, I started picking at the scab. Then it started bleeding (Actually, that was a bit starnge, it was literally the size of a pinprick) and I thought "A-ha!" and so I dipped her head in it.

Any other comments on the story?

[Sontar Ha]

Aha size of a pin prick and you dipped your action figures head into it Nah, I get what you mean.

And the story, well... The first part was sort of redundant, could have easily been added onto the 2nd part, all it needed was miss Biko to find the note. The speech bubbles were a bit confusing, people read from left to right and up to down, so generally whatever's said first is nearer the top and towards the left. That seemed to have been fixed in the later parts though.

Part two, not much happened again, she fell through time, some of the things were quite amusing.

Part three was it ending, bit confusing with how he tripped the dinosaur up though. Glad you didn't go the easy route and kill her off though, killing companions in an attempt to seem 'deep' and 'moving' annoys me a bit when not done effectively.

I think this would have been better as one large chapter, but thats my 50 pence.

[The Professor]

Aha size of a pin prick and you dipped your action figures head into it Nah, I get what you mean.

Stop it, you're scaring me!

And the story, well... The first part was sort of redundant, could have easily been added onto the 2nd part, all it needed was miss Biko to find the note. The speech bubbles were a bit confusing, people read from left to right and up to down, so generally whatever's said first is nearer the top and towards the left. That seemed to have been fixed in the later parts though.

Reading it back, I do see what you mean, especially in that first slide.

Part two, not much happened again, she fell through time, some of the things were quite amusing.

Part three was it ending, bit confusing with how he tripped the dinosaur up though. Glad you didn't go the easy route and kill her off though, killing companions in an attempt to seem 'deep' and 'moving' annoys me a bit when not done effectively.

I think this would have been better as one large chapter, but thats my 50 pence.

Just to clear that up - I assume what you mean is the part where he uses the screwdriver? He uses that to disorienate the Dinosaur, so it messes up it's hearing. Or something. I don't think it ever trips up at all though? I know there's a bit where it's leaning over, but that was to eat her.

I know what you mean when you said about killing of companions - I've only seen one that I've ever liked, and that was in one of Torchwood95's videos (I watched them before I joined the forum). It was at the end, where he shot Sophie, and then her name comes up, and the letters rearrange... I thought that was rally well done, because you could see that it was planned from the start.


With this comic, I wanted to try my hand at a more spaced out, continuing comic with cliffhangers. (To an extent.) As it was the first comic I made in PowerPoint, I was on new ground, if you like. But I think that the different parts, and making it in PowerPoint, helped me to make it faster, so it wasn't so ridiculously spaced out.

[Sontar Ha]

Just to clear that up - I assume what you mean is the part where he uses the screwdriver? He uses that to disorienate the Dinosaur, so it messes up it's hearing. Or something. I don't think it ever trips up at all though? I know there's a bit where it's leaning over, but that was to eat her.

I saw some wire and the dinosaur walking over it, it basically looked like it was tripping. And Its all fine and well telling me this after the comic, you have to put it actually into the comic, not explain it afterwards.

I know what you mean when you said about killing of companions - I've only seen one that I've ever liked, and that was in one of Torchwood95's videos (I watched them before I joined the forum). It was at the end, where he shot Sophie, and then her name comes up, and the letters rearrange... I thought that was rally well done, because you could see that it was planned from the start.

It was okay but I felt that
a. The anagram came from no-where, no mention of it before, and
b. I'd have been more impressed if she was given a happy ending.

With this comic, I wanted to try my hand at a more spaced out, continuing comic with cliffhangers. (To an extent.) As it was the first comic I made in PowerPoint, I was on new ground, if you like. But I think that the different parts, and making it in PowerPoint, helped me to make it faster, so it wasn't so ridiculously spaced out.

Yeah, powerpoint can work with comics, just a couple of tips would be to keep to a simple colour scheme, white bubbles with black text always works. Also maybe change the font?

Perhaps it might look better landscape aswell.

So yeah, my thoughts!

[a64]

Literally blood sweat and tears! (Well, maybe not the tears, but probably some sweat!)

The original notes are interesting, and a bit more complicated (and confusing) than it turned out. But I prefer the finished version.

[The Professor]

It's becuause it was a remote control dinosaur, so there was wire coming out of it.

The colour scheme is meant to represent each different person's voice. I think this time I didn't get the colours so well perhaps.